Recensioni per
L'orrendo foco
di GaiaTon
Intanto... grazie per aver aggiornato così presto, sei davvero brava anche in questo. Devo dire che mi hai sorpresa ancora una volta, lasciandomi soddisfatta della prima lettura. |
la storia si fa sempre più interessante....pian piano si definiscono i personaggi e i loro ruoli...mi incuriosisce molto la "relazione"(assolutamente amichevole...per ora mi sembra!^^)tra porthos a aramis...e la conseguente,celatissima,gelosia di athos....il nostro buon gigante è di una tenerezza infinita con la ragazza.... |
Mi sembrava di essere al posto di Aramis mentre scendeva le scale...hai fatto un ottimo racconto, la tensione era palpabile così come il timore di lei e la tenerezza di D'Artagnan e Porthos. |
Hello! I hope this good! ^ ______ ^, A very emotional episode, but I'm fearing complications, Porthos wants to feel better Aramis goes every day with a new surprise for her, as she knows it does not, the first time he brought a drink that was fashion, gave him chocolate, with the help of Dorottie since then she takes every day, the count was that made her happy, it felt strange Aramis Porthos the Musketeer his friend feared, was now his nurse, he was wrong, I knew that he had other things to do, but he was all day with her, once Aramis did not want him, why not allow him to draw, but felt calm with him, Aramis got up, he gradually recovered no longer bandaged his feet, so do I send Dorottie comfortable shoes, Porthos came one day, but the maid said she was waiting in the garden, Aramis came not long ago, but could not stop and Porthos, with difficult under the stairs and out into the garden, where his friend was waiting, she could smell the scent of the garden and the stable, Porthos the greeting and said he had a surprise for her, helped her get to the stables, where with joy saw a beautiful gray mare, she gave Porthos wanted a ride as before, but as Aramis was happy, sad quickly, she had the strength to stay, she would deny but the giant got up and went to horse, she had to ride as a woman and was used as a man, not to repress Aramis out galloping at full speed, and I look Portos wonder how she felt, she smiled said he was very happy, thoughtful saw the giant and asked, Aramis was told how his life as a child, as Francois met, they talked and laughed as before, but felt more sincere Aramis, spoke of his love, Porthos apologize for talking about things that were not for a lady. Aramis laughed, it was not his fault, Porthos said he had met a beautiful young woman, she described the place and Aramis knew who he was, she told how she met Charmine and it was a good friend to her, asked Porthos permission to date her, Aramis said that if you claim why they are never present, she said she knew them well, did not want to play with her, he gave his word of being a gentleman, when he helped her lower back Aramis Porthos embrace, she felt safe and happy with him, he felt better than Athos, was different, Aramis thanked him for the day but wanted to give something better, he said he would do a portrait of him, but Porthos was decided as I was to pose, Aramis annoying showed him the picture he drew of Athos, asked if he wanted something, he was surprised by the resemblance, I ask him if he had posed, shyly said no Aramis, Porthos examine the entire drawing until he found the inscription "Dido and Aeneas," the wonder what it meant but she did not answer change the subject and began to draw, then a soldier came in, handed him a document to Porthos, said that by order of Captain Aramis had to go to Chantelet, slowly recovers Aramis, Porthos cheer about every day, but Aramis knows he has to deal with his life, should not be with her all day, Porthos did everything possible to make out, gave him a little of what most wanted, horse riding and feel free, but what happens, do not tell me that Aramis is feeling more than friendship for Porthos, compare the degree of Athos, the menso already begun to lose, I think that a review of Porthos Athos will cause problems if you said to the giant portrait of Athos and Aramis made separate mention of the title of the drawing, Athos will suspect something, he must know the history, knows that is not Well, Aramis will be terrified of going to jail?, bad memories are coming back, but support will help Porthos, she has to go because Dartagnan Athos and returned with one of his executioners?, you must identify ?, as you will feel to see it?, Athos will be jealous to see how she clings to Porthos?, I hope the next chapter soon, thanks for sharing ^ ____ ^. |
ciao! |
OMG! Ok, me lo rileggerò come al solito altre due volte. |
Oh, sì! Mi piace molto questa storia! |
Hello! here we are! ^ ____ ^, A chapter very confusing, do not really think about, but I congratulate you is a beautiful chapter, you know move and show the emotions of the characters, Aramis woke up hours after the visit of Porthos, Dartagnan and Constance, she recalled playing cards, talked, at one point looked sadly at Constance, when she had her beautiful blond hair, was his pride, now there was nothing left, she whispered to him, he told the queen wanted Aramis enlarge Private wonder Aramis Athos, Porthos and Dartagnan tried to lie, but Aramis knew the truth, could not deceive her, besides the man's behavior left no doubt of his contempt, she tried not to give importance at a time that was left Dartagnan only with Aramis, apologized for the behavior of Athos, she said it did not matter that it expected this result, the young man looked into his eyes, but Aramis I look pushy, wanted to know how is it, Dartagnan said no talks it, always quiet and drinking, after the young man asked her, as she was, said Aramis, who is always thinking of him, the young man worry, she went on to say that I needed, Dartagnan said if I wanted to talk to Athos, she said he could not bear his accusing gaze also wanted him to be alone, because he wanted to see her, Aramis told him that he knew she loved him, Dartagnan was surprised and asked how?, she said that was when the release of the flames, thought it was his last chance, the young man smiled and said it would change everything, Aramis shook his head, too many reasons preventing their relationship, they were neither friends, as might be something else, heard the return of their other friends, Dartagnan the look in his eyes and walked away, Aramis told him if he could write, they had dinner and retired, Aramis was enlisted to sleep, but she resumed her drawings that night, the day after Porthos was with her all the day, at night when she was alone, the maiden name on her door and said he wanted to see the musketeer Athos, Aramis froze, stuttering response to the entry, do not know what to think, she looked in the mirror but what he saw embarrassed, not wanting to see her in that condition but could do nothing, just comfortable in his shawl, Athos entered as a gentleman, the greeting with a neutral tone, she observed was just as I remembered, so manly, his bearing proudly replied Aramis greeting, with his head down and weak, she was indignant at his eyes, helpless in his opinion, he knew that was Athos the musketeer Aramis see that woman in misleading, in that body damaged but not was nothing, Athos said he went to leave, go out with Dartagnan in the morning, she said she knew, I try to look into his eyes, but gave him a chill, he promised to return Athos, Aramis is strange for the declaration, but it Athos always knew he was risking a lot in each mission, I knew I could lose it, looked down, trying not to mourn, Athos realized, when I look at him with short hair, she thought she saw the young apprentice, she felt his gaze curious, did not want her hurt, she said she was still someone and had a home to go when you feel good, did not want to burden anyone could stand on its own, Athos could not believe my ears, these words and with a weak voice, could not believe that was his friend, the proud musketeer Aramis, wanted revenge on those who had been hurt, he was surprised by the need of wanting to hug her, but his heart jump when I look so fragile he promised he would return again, no idea why he said it, I look into the eyes, trying to communicate without words as before, but could not Aramis elusive gaze, did not understand, look at her tenderly, did not know that will drive that night to go to it, Athos began to reflect, but did not know how he was getting close to Aramis, she was come to Athos, Aramis not mistaken he approached to kiss her, so close to her face, she closed eyes, always dreamed of this moment, but just then she told Athos, who did not, Aramis away from him, clung to her shawl to give himself courage, he said he was too much for kissing a woman it, Aramis always dreamed of being kissed by Athos, but when was the musketeer Aramis beautiful, proud and brave, now she was nothing, it was not worth the kiss her, he never would have kissed this woman treacherous, for I wanted to give a kiss?, Aramis did not understand his behavior, first not to see it, behaves cold, indifferent and distant to her, I needed Aramis, Athos, but that was not, she did not want his pity, he preferred his contempt for he understood, but this strange affection false, do not understand, she could not bear to lose him, Athos did not understand why it stopped, but refrained from making a hurtful comment to what he said it was hurt by his rejection, rejected by this woman Athos , he did not understand why he went to see her, he had struggled with himself to go in, fought his pride wounded and his desire to see her, did not want to ignore their emotions, he lost the fight, turned from Aramis and recalled the captain's words, understood why they were only asked to see her, if her feelings were real friendly, he could not deceive Aramis, she knew he was lying, he understood that the promise was not for her if not for him, he wanted convince himself again, Aramis looked at him carefully, I was scared of him, did not understand his behavior, before she felt calm and safe with him, but now, I just wanted to leave, did not feel comfortable presence, with force grabbed her shawl, Athos hurt his pride, he said he was retiring, did not expect that kind of result, disappointed and made a bow out quietly |
sì...certo che in quanto complicazioni(mi riferisco al rapporto che si è palesemente creato tra athos e aramis),qui ce ne sono a bizzeffe!!!! |
ciao! |
A... a... assurdo! No, credimi, di tutto avrei potuto immaginare, ma mai un incontro così. Veramente avevo il dubbio che lui non ci andasse affatto da lei. Invece è chiaro e lampante che la ama, è chiaro anche a lui, non capisco cosa volesse dimostrare con quel bacio. E, lasciamelo dire, finalmente, Aramis solo per un attimo ritorna ad essere quella che era. La persona combattiva e risoluta che era da moschettiere. Anche se gli dice di non baciarla perchè si sente brutta. Non capisco neanche lei, credimi. E' tutto così confuso, contorto, lui che le fa la promessa di tornare. Ma non le rivela il perchè di quella promessa. Già, perchè? Me lo puoi spiegare tu? Io sono confusa più che mai, ho bisogno di rileggere con calma questo capitolo, come ho fatto più o meno con tutti gli altri, poi farò una recensione più accurata e ti rivolgerò altre domande. Purtroppo in questo momento ho davvero poco tempo, ma non volevo rischiare di non scrivere niente, le prime sensazioni sono molto importanti. Non mi deludi mai, sei davvero bravissima. |
questi due ultimi capitoli sono bellissimi brava ...povera aramis quanto soffre |
Hola! espero este bien? ^______^, finalmente sabemos cómo se siente nuestro Athos, pero creo que todos lo sabíamos, esa noche después del interrogatorio de Aramis, Athos se fue a su casa, donde cree el que está a salvo de todo, menos de su propio dolor, de sus recuerdos, cada recuerdo o pensamiento que tiene le desagrada, porque siempre esta Aramis presente, pero esta vez el lo recuerda de otra forma, cuando lo recuerda como hombre, trata de pensar en la reacción de la mujer, pensó en los motivos que lo llevo a la mentira, pero el solo piensa que Aramis nunca existió, no sabe nada de él, perdió a su mejor amigo por una mujer, una bruja, mentirosa, traidora, el se sentía engañado, usado, recordó la primera vez que lo traiciono, cuando acepto el cargo de capitán, el lo había perdonado, porque era un hombre, pero fue una mujer otra vez, el se refugió en la bebida, Athos pensó que el traidor tuvo el castigo justo a su pecado por años, pero él quería callar el dolor de saber herido a la persona que más quería y no quería admitir, pero se sintió peor cuando Aramis le confesó que lo amaba, ella que lo había engañado, ella que hizo todo para vengar a su amor, ahora lo amaba?, esto le molestaba, ella lo amaba, pero para él era más fácil odiarla, siguió bebiendo, desde esa confesión trato de buscar las obscuras intenciones de la bruja, que quería de el, cada vez que la vio el era distante y frio, para no cae en su trampa, la primera vez que volvió a ver, casi se cae su armadura, por eso permaneció en las sombras, para no ceder se repitió que era un traidor y que tenia lo que se merecía, se lo gano, Athos ya borracho siguió su condena, imaginando al mosquetero Aramis, pero un pensamiento le dolió, Milady había hecho daño a Aramis, ella que había luchado contra esa mujer, cayó en sus manos, Milady de vio se quemada, no Aramis, pensó en lo que fue el mosquetero Aramis, ahora no era nada, el se pregunto si Aramis se curaría, pero de inmediato volvió a pensar en la bruja, Athos comenzó a cuestionar a Aramis, que quería de el, el amor entre ellos era imposible, el no quería amar, no quería volver a ser herido, traicionado por una mujer, tiene miedo de amar, era más fácil negarlo, odiarla, esa mujer le robo a su amigo, su hermano, Aramis tenía lo que se merecía, el solo iba por Milady como una nueva mision, venganza por su parte, pero no por Aramis, el odia a Aramis, el recogió el chal solo para no ver sus heridas, el solo quiere hacerle daño, el no la va a perdonar, no quiere ir a verla, porque no tiene compasión para ella, quiere que Aramis pague por todo el daño, por desgracia Aramis sabe los sentimientos de Athos, ella cree que se merece toda esa tortura, por el daño causado a su amigo, Aramis sabe que Athos la odia, ella mejor que nadie lo conoce, Aramis confesó que lo amaba, pero lo dijo porque pensó que iba a morir, ahora siente vergüenza por la confesión, sabe que eso molesto a Athos, el ahoga sus penas en la botella, como se sentirá cuando este sobrio, la realidad le va a molestar, Aramis escondió un dibujo cuando ellos llegaron, es un dibujo en rojo, tal vez dibujo una hoguera (fuego), o dibujo una escena sangrienta, espero pronto el siguiente capítulo, gracias por compartir ^_____^. |
Ciao! Bentornata, non ci hai fatto attendere molto. |
se vuoi posso anche chiamare gli artificieri per la bomba di Athos ma io preferisco farla scoppiare! |